Tarantula
The patience of stone, whose surface belies calm.
Neither warm nor cold, but unfeeling.
It digresses and turns inward, a vessel reversed
in course, in body, in function, the
outward notion separate but inclusive,
darkness expanding, the moist
earth crumbling yet holding its form:
acceptance of fate become
another’s mouth,
the means to closure and affirmation
driven not by lust nor fear
but through involuntary will.
Neither warm nor cold, but unfeeling.
The patience of stone.
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Thanks for reblogging, Stuart.
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You’re very welcome, my friend :)!
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neither warm nor cold but able to dilute your substance into gelly and absorb you whole.
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There is that to consider too, isn’t there?
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Superbly written 🙂
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Thank you, Michael.
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i love this so much…especially how every line is unfinished and continued on in the next line,its all connected.Great technique,i’ll have to borrow that some time.
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Thank you. A little technique goes a long way towards moving a poem along, especially with regards to rhythm and visual flow. I’m glad it worked for you in this one.
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Ah, that’s it. I was trying to pin down what was giving the poem that texture.
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Good stuff.. but I don’t see the reference to “Tarantula”. Help??
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Hmm. I don’t write with a particular objective in mind, but you might consider the word “tarantula.” What does it evoke? In part, the poem might touch on a view of tarantula as vessel, as body, as both taker and giver of life. Or not. 🙂
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good stuff. as usual. anyway, i would think most spiders do have the patience of stone. not in the long run of course.
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None of us match stone. But it’s all relative…
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Separate but inclusive…hmmm. I’m thinking about that!
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A conundrum, no?
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Yes, an intriguing one!
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Yep, stones will still be patient when we’ll all be gone. Now, are they unfeeling? There was a time when men thought animals were unfeeling. And, later, men thought plants and trees were unfeeling. Today, we know better. Who knows if we don’t find tomorrow that stones have feeling. Maybe there’s will, we just don’t know it. Great work though.
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I come from a long line of animists…
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Exactly. That’s why, with stones, men built temples.
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This is perfect.
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Only in its imperfection. But thank you!
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Scary good.
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Thanks very much!
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I like the balance between what I think is directness in the first part and mysterious obliqueness later on. Well done.
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Glad it worked for you. Thanks.
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And you’ve described all the reasons I dislike spiders… very good…
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I don’t want to cuddle with them, but they’re interesting creatures.
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Excellent.
Although, I’d have liked it if you had kept the entire poem in one block.
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Thanks very much. Can you tell me why you’d prefer one block? Just curious. We don’t learn if we don’t ask.
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At the present state, the poem is divided into two-line stanzas. A stanza typically represents a fresh idea, and the entire poem represents one idea. Some of the stanzas end with an incomplete sentence. If this poem were in one block, it would allow for some excellent enjambment.
You could perhaps, leave the last two lines as a separate stanza, but the rest of the poem would be near flawless, if it were in one block. =)
Keep the awesomeness coming.
Cheers!
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Thanks for your well thought out reply. I appreciate it.
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Anytime. We’re always in a constant state of learning. I genuinely feel that your poetry is exquisite. Please feel feel to critique my works as well… I would like it. =)
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Agreed. I write to learn. Please feel free to offer criticism here. And thank you for your kind words.
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I do not want to know how hairy they can be! LOL
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Very hairy, Sherrie!
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