O at the Edges

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Snow Country

Posted on November 10, 2015 by robert okaji

Snow Country

desolate the reach
of space a
curved line of

white empty as
the loneliness one
feels the tone

is different on
a day like
this she says

unaware that her
words fall like
snow in the

mountains soft quiet
in the roar
no one hears

Another piece from the eighties…

30 thoughts on “Snow Country”

Steph on November 10, 2015 at 10:44 am said:

Wow, I am impressed!

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- robert okaji on November 10, 2015 at 12:02 pm said:
  
  Thanks, Steph.
  
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Dr Meg Sorick on November 10, 2015 at 11:37 am said:

The eighties? It has staying power, for sure. This is beautiful!

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- robert okaji on November 10, 2015 at 12:04 pm said:
  
  Thanks, Meg. I haven’t kept much from the eighties, but this one managed to survive the various purgings.
  
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  - Dr Meg Sorick on November 10, 2015 at 12:09 pm said:
    
    I’m glad it did!
    
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midnighttheblues on November 10, 2015 at 11:42 am said:

Very “Kawabatan”. The train came out of the long tunnel into the snow country.

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- robert okaji on November 10, 2015 at 12:05 pm said:
  
  Thank you. One of my favorite novels. The poem has nothing to do with the novel, yet seems to have everything to do it.
  
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  - midnighttheblues on November 10, 2015 at 2:18 pm said:
    
    Your poem resulted in my moving the novel from the book shelf to the stack of to-be-read books by the bed.
    
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  - robert okaji on November 10, 2015 at 2:42 pm said:
    
    It’s been nearly 30 years since I read it. I might have to pull it off the shelf, too. 🙂
    
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Iris@poetsmith on November 10, 2015 at 11:54 am said:

Very beautiful piece, Robert!

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- robert okaji on November 10, 2015 at 12:06 pm said:
  
  Thank you, Iris.
  
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crownless26 on November 10, 2015 at 2:45 pm said:

Beautiful

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- robert okaji on November 10, 2015 at 5:43 pm said:
  
  Thank you.
  
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curtisbausse on November 11, 2015 at 12:49 am said:

Great one, Robert! (I hope not too many gems disappeared in the purging).

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- robert okaji on November 11, 2015 at 6:04 am said:
  
  Believe me, Curtis. No gems were lost.
  
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  - curtisbausse on November 11, 2015 at 6:30 am said:
    
    I’ll take your word for it. Fortunately, enough remain.
    
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ricky1871 on November 14, 2015 at 3:05 am said:

Lovely piece. Also, one of my all time favourite Kawabata novels. This, and House of Sleeping Beauties.

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- robert okaji on November 14, 2015 at 7:58 am said:
  
  Thank you. I’m also fond of A Thousand Cranes. I need to reread Kawabata. It’s been a long time.
  
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Radhika on November 14, 2015 at 3:08 am said:

Wonderful!

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- robert okaji on November 14, 2015 at 7:59 am said:
  
  Thank you, Radhika.
  
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gspottedpen on December 1, 2015 at 7:29 am said:

Very well crafted; the imagery is so haunting and tempts the mind to a surreal phantasmagoria; not only that you have delved into a stoic tone of emotion. Your poetry is well liked. Anand Bose from Kerala.

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- robert okaji on December 1, 2015 at 2:05 pm said:
  
  Thank you, Anand.
  
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gspottedpen on December 1, 2015 at 7:31 am said:

The imagery is hauntingly beautiful and the emotions are a ruffled to suit it. Anand Bose from Kerala.

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- robert okaji on December 1, 2015 at 2:06 pm said:
  
  Thanks very much.
  
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Carolyn Foote Edelmann on December 2, 2015 at 11:21 pm said:

Images and poem exquisite — and I agree that this has staying power. Congratulations and thank you for ‘liking’ my NJWILDBEAUTY Nature Blog. I will now follow yours. Carolyn Foote Edelmann

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- robert okaji on December 3, 2015 at 6:28 am said:
  
  Thank you, Carolyn. Much appreciated.
  
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traditionshome on December 4, 2015 at 2:35 pm said:

the eighties?

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- robert okaji on December 4, 2015 at 2:54 pm said:
  
  Oh, yes. Some things refuse to go away!
  
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lou on December 7, 2015 at 11:15 am said:

wonderful imagery…the imagery here is very nostalgic for me personally. lovely work

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- robert okaji on December 7, 2015 at 11:27 am said:
  
  Thank you, Lou. I’m glad it works for you.
  
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