I Look for You with Satellite View
But binoculars are my oldest friend.
Watching you flash between leaf and branch, stone
and sky, I remember, as the black groans
in, obliterating light at the end
of the day’s voice, that everyone descends,
our debts counted, stacked and restacked, the loans
unpaid and endless, like breath or the moans
of autumn’s bed spiraling back. Light sends
you elsewhere – the silver-tipped moon leaf, a
wisp of fog tracing your leg’s passage in
the sand. That empty bottle. You could be
there, above ground, or scattered where I lay,
an orbiting eye forever open,
looking, searching always, trying to see.
This is the 31st poem written for the August 2016 Tupelo Press 30/30 Challenge. Many thanks to Ken Gierke for sponsoring and providing the title.
Fabulous.
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Thank you, Susan. I couldn’t resist attempting another sonnet.
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I love sonnets…
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The limitations of the form (syllables, rhyme patterns) seems to open avenues for me. Enjoyable!
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Done, now
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Yep. And now I’m goiing to slack off a bit, and not write for a couple of days (although I must admit to having started a 32nd poem).
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Excellent! I’d like to think of the unpaid loans as those times when line of sight is not an option, and we have to rely on the image we hold in the mind’s eye.
Thank you for your month-long marathon and for reminding us, once again, about the 30/30 Project, which, of course, is ongoing.
Ken
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Thanks, Ken. A poem I wouldn’t have written had you not offered the title. Oh, those unseen things!
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Beautiful…i am in awe
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So pleased you like it. Thank you.
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Great month. Enjoyed every day.
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Thanks very much. I, too, have enjoyed it.
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Thought provoking.
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Thank you, Robyn. Much appreciated.
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Wonderful! And congrats – it has been so rewarding and amazing to read the month long contributions, of you and others! Outstanding how so many came together and contributed, and how you have pulled out such an incredible diversity of poems!
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Writing them is of course very rewarding, and doing so with the help and collaboration of friends and even a few strangers is doubly rewarding. Great fun.
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Bravo
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😬
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Nicely done, i for one have looked forward to opening my reader to find your words.😇
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Thank you, Ellen. You’ve made my day!
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As your words have often made mine 😇
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😊
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Thank you for liking one of my poems, Mr. Okaji. In return I am grateful to have found your work – this is beautiful.
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Thank you! I enjoyed “Eviction.”
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I am against loans ,it has ruined economy
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I am against predatory lenders, and those totally devoid of scruples.
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Again, as my son’s band teacher often said, “I want you kids to exceed your potential!”
Well…you did!
From the very first line where I am reminded that binoculars have been a “friend” of mine — cheap, plastic, and with a miserable image even their five-year old user knew was pathetic.
And then to the nearly equally “groaner” Cub Scout binoculars. Yuk!
But then…a succession of truly good/great/incredible binoculars from 6×15, 7×35 7×50, 10×50 to my “Monster” 11×80 binoculars.
Yes, binoculars were, and continue to be, my oldest friend.
And it took a truly superb sonnet to draw forth this huge comment from me…cause I durn shore usually don’t care for that there sonnet c******a!
*grin*
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Obi-Ron, you are too kind, as always. I had the Cub Scout telescope.
Sonnets are your friend, Ron, if only you let them enter your house. 🙂
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This is great! One of my favorites written by you.
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Thank you, Kindra. Ken G. gets credit for providing the impetus.
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You’re so welcome. And props to Ken G. 🙂
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Excellent sonnet Robert. Loved it 🙂
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Thanks, Davy. I’ve not written many sonnets over the past few years, but may take them up again.
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You have the talent Robert. Looking forward to reading more of them. Have a great weekend.
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Thanks, Davy. All weekends are great!
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Here’s to that Robert 🙂
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I’m impressed with the emotion and description, and extremely impressed by the free feeling you achieved while staying with the structure of this work. Amazing.~DM
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Thanks, Deon. I tend to meander, so having to work within the constrictions of the formula actually helps.
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Congratulations to all of accomplishments, having your poem post on the Clade Song, did more than 30 poems in 30/30. I enjoy reading your poems. Thank you for stopping by my blog and like my new post.
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Thanks very much. August was a good month. Let’s see what September brings!
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Bam!
Not many satellites can boast such a grounded perspective (nor will they generally so candidly and rightly extol their own voyeuristic nature)! You certainly could have given Petrarch a thing or two to consider…
I’m awed by all you’ve accomplished this past month, and with such verve, grace, and humility, to boot.
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Petrarch probably would have given me the malocchio, but I’m sure we would have made up over a bottle of hearty red. 🙂
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😜
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This is creepy
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You’ll get no argument from me.
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Beautiful – as all have said. The cadence is wonderful as well! So glad you found me 🙂
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Thank you, Sharon. I’m very pleased to have found your blog!
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