With No Mountain in View
Like a mirage, you shift ever forward,
blonde hair concealing your eyes, one
long leg draped over the chair’s arm,
a reminder of inconstancy and promises
constructed to collapse. Such power,
such wisdom, at seventeen.
Through the window I see
horses in the paddock, a lone
figure by the road, and steam
rising from the earth. Your voice,
as it was, and mine, as it never sounded,
merged only in fantasy. Something
crumbles at the edge. A crow flaps away.
“With No Mountain In View” is included in my chapbook, From Every Moment a Second, available for order now via Amazon.com and Finishing Line Press.
O at the Edges 
Guessing this captures a photograph (or mental image) combined with deep reflections … and in its mysterious mix of details and lack of specifics (male? female?), I get lost in my own reflections … Intriguing. Someone could begin here and write a novella! In fact, several someones could do so and end up with widely divergent stories … fascinating!
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Several unrelated mental images converge in this one, left open to interpretation. 🙂
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Indeed, the interpretation is teasing away at my gears …
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As it should!
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I like but was left lingering for more.
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Hmm. I probably could have offered more, but I took the “mysterious” course. 🙂
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The dissolving finale of the poem is nicely done: the crumbling which seems to startle the crow that ‘flaps away.’ Lovely stuff.
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Thanks, Daniel. There was originally an additional line, which was a little too neat for my taste. So I wacked it.
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Like whack-a-mole. It seems like a nod to If your Matter could Reform, the start of that process, somewhat.
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Well, I’m merciless when it comes to
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cutting lines. Damn phone!
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Very good. That’s dedication.
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Persistence!
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“…inconstancy and promises constructed to collapse.” Ah yes. I remember it well.
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All too common, I believe.
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I tried to leave a comment earlier, but it wouldn’t send for some reason…I have been having trouble with that lately, so if it shows up sometime from another dimension, I apologise lol.
But I love this!! So much in here, and it’s intriguing.
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WordPress does drive me a bit batty at times! And thank you. I’m glad it intrigues you.
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You’re welcome!
And most definitely 🙂
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