I think on this one I was channeling my inner Jane Hirshfield with a side of WCW: http://www.vayavya.in/robert-okaji.html
My apologies to both.
O at the Edges
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O at the Edges 
I was worried about you for a second that you were channeling your inner Stone Cold Steve Austin. But upon reading the poem I realized “oh, THAT wcw. Whew.”
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Haha!
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Phew, indeed! I’ll try to be careful with future WCWs.
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really enjoyed this first look at your work. from one big sky land to another… looking forward to more.
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Congratulations on publication. Thanks for reading my blog.
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lovely poem
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Thank you for liking a haiku @ jjhaiku2014. I love your poem!
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OK, so showing my ignorance: what/who is WCW?
Loved the poem wcws if any, incuded.
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Oh, sorry. The good doctor William Carlos Williams.
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Hah! That’s what I lvoe about the internet, one thing leads to another and you discover great stuff along the way, like the good doctor WCW. Thank you.
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My goodness, I am so glad I read your poem Irretrievable. It is everything I admire
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Thank you. You’ve made my day!
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Thanks so much for following me on Cold. Back atcha. Love a good writer.
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Thank you for liking a post. Keep on writing:0)
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Thanks for reading my post. Keep up the great work!
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Merci for visiting my blog and wishing you all the best for yours!
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That is a gorgeous photo!
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That is a GORGEOUS photo. 🙂
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Thank you. It was a spur-of-the-moment, turn the phone upside down and hope for the best shot.
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An extraordinary poem! I love the way you placed the words, and I love the way the words tap deep into my soul. I will re-read, just for the pleasure. Thank you.
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Thank you. Formatting certainly plays an essential role in poetry, capable of transforming average into good. Of course it all begins with the words!
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This going forward and retreating also reminds me of some parts of Four Quartets, “into the passage we did not take” and so forth.
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That’s a connection I never would have made. Thank you.
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I’m glad someone else didn’t know, and wasn’t afraid to ask, who WCM was. And while I didn’t understand the last part about the green flame burning, I loved (and “got”) the rest of it. The simple truth about how unimportant and unworthy we really are is in perfect sync with my book, “Overcome Any Personal Obstacle, Including Alcoholism, By Understanding Your Ego” — http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/leewriter. The basic premise of the book, and my blog on WordPress, is that root of all evil is the ego, which I define as the voice inside your head that assures you that you are fundamentally (spiritually) separate, and more important and better, than the rest of the sentient beings in the universe. Your poem puts the ego, and associated Deadly Sin of PRIDE, in their place. Lovely job!
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I of course had a specific word and image in mind, but prefer to let the reader find meaning wherever it may be found.
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Good old Jane and William would be impressed. This poem is masterful, clever, evocative. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for stopping by Whole in the Head and liking my rain. Happy Poetry Month!
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Thank you. I enjoy your blog and will return. Happy Poetry Month indeed!
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Good work Robert! Thanks too for looking at my blog and congrats on the publishing gigs…awesomne
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Good work Robert! congrats on the publishing gig…thanks for reading my blog too Peace, jeane
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Yes, congratulations and I am glad you like my post. I am doing an entire series along the same lines so watch for more if you like this one. Tomorrow’s post will be about “Ice Collapses”.
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Oh, lordy. This is my poem. For me, I mean. It speaks to me. You have no idea. Or maybe you do. Aargh.
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And you’ve made my day!
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Dark and Lovely, with a hint of sun. Loved it.
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I’m enjoying your work. Fabulous!Thanks for dropping by my blog.
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Likewise. Thanks very much.
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That was great, “…..irretrievable shape of the word….” Couldn´t fit better that line the way you wrote it. Uniquely wrote it, love unique and well written. Always a good combination to read and to try it myself.
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Thank you. I’m glad you like it.
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Oh yes!
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Thanks for liking Zeros and Ones. I look forward to reading your poetry but it will take time.So much to enjoy.
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Merci for visiting my blog and wishing you all the best for yours – Bon weekend!
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Really enjoyed this poem. Evocative, for me.
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Thank you.
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Congratulations! I enjoyed the poem:)
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Enjoyed your work, look forward to reading morre
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Thank you.
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thx for checking in on me again…love your pics blessings, Jeane
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Be encouraged! I would say more, but you know how it is when one can’t find the words…again.
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Ha!
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Wow!
Thank you.
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Thanks for making that a complete experience. It inspires me to take more care in the visual effect and rhythm of my own writings.
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Thanks for your kind words. I’m so pleased you enjoyed it.
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Well done. Poem & photo. 🙂
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well done and congratulations. (and Thank you for “liking” my post.)
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Congratulations, Robert! 🙂
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I can see why it was published. You are a talented wordsmith. I enjoyed the poem very original.
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wow lovely, lovely, lovely poem. oops I said that one too many times but it’s deserving and congrats on being published. Thanks for dropping by my blog and following me. regards
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Particularly feel the way you have set the poem out. The beat is soothing and dark with the shining hope glimmering thanks
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I’m so pleased you feel that way.
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Hello Robert! Great poem. I enjoyed it.
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Thank you.
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I’ve been enjoying your poetry this morning — and there’s no cream in the house for my coffee. Yes, your stuff is that good. Thank you for sharing.
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Ah, the power of poetry! Thank you!
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nice piece, contemplative, piercing, searing, and tranquil with nothing at odds with the other. Easy read, flowing, eye pleasing, and memorable. Now and Zen for me. Smile Randy
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Thank you. I tinkered with this one for years. It just wasn’t right. And then it was.
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I know that feeling. I read and reread (re-dundancy aside) my poems over and over (please excuse the re-petition) until I like the sound, flow, imagery, and force of meaning. Most writers do – don’t you think?
As someone told me a long time ago – time takes time. I hated hearing that…. Randy
I also heard something along these lines: write, write, write, read, read, read, listen, listen, listen, rewrite, rewrite, and then write again.
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And then put it in a drawer…
But I believe that many poets, especially newer poets, don’t pay sufficient attention to sound. If they read their poems aloud, they might hear the bumpy diction, the glitches detracting from the greater work.
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Yes. You are so right.
I’ve been taught that over the years. Listen. listen. Listen.
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Lovely – or some other such word I can’t access right now 😉
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Ha! Thanks for reading the poem.
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Beautiful poem, Robert!
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Thank you!
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Love your work! Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for reading it!
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Well done, congratulations, also thank you for taking the time to read my work so happy you like them.
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I like the spirit of the poem and its format.
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