(Hotel Eden) In Full Light We Are Not Even a Shadow
Which is to say clarity persists in
increments, in the silent space between
color and lens, within parables seen
in the incomplete: straw, hand. Imagine
white valued more than manner as hidden
thought remains obscured. Lower your eyes, lean
forward. Perspectives tilt towards the mean,
suggesting purpose. When we examine
intent, do we find it? The irony
of bottled cork, of sullied paradise,
a coiled wire, the parrot whose voice,
unheard, implicates us. What felony
must we commit to admit the device
in play? Pull or release? The mimic’s choice.
Notes: “In full light we are not even a shadow” is a line from Antonio Porchia’s Voices.
Hotel Eden is the title of a piece of art by Joseph Cornell. An image may be found here:
http://www.wikiart.org/en/joseph-cornell/untitled-the-hotel-eden-1945
This made its first appearance here in March 2015.
O at the Edges 
“color and lens, within parables…” absolutely beautiful
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Thank you, Jessica.
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Bravo, sir
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Thank you.
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Clarity persists in increments … expedited here and there by poems like this one! Thank you.
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A little here, a little there. It all adds up!
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Okaji using rhyme? What next, a breakfast cereal you can eat at dinner?
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Hey, it happens on occasion, but the form escapes most readers due to the “hidden” nature of the rhymes. Rice! For breakfast, lunch or dinner!
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You make use of the enjambment to good effect, it nicely tucks them away, but i have a good nose. i feel that the spaces in the poem aren’t as deep as your more open/free poems. The rhyme sort of tautens the scansion.
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The rhyme dictates the poem’s direction, and its expansiveness, as does the syllable count. I write these more for the exercise than anything else. And they’re fun.
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it’s certainly an exercise writing formal poetry.
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It’s also a crutch, in that I’ll use a form to shake things up when the writing isn’t going well. It forces the hamster wheels and gears in my brain to adjust to the imposed limitations (which are quite liberating).
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Subtle rhymes that just enhance the flow. Thanks for another lesson in good writing.
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Thank you. They’re interesting to play around with.
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This is wonderful. peace
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So pleased you found it so. Thank you!
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