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Huazi Ridge (After Wang Wei)

Posted on January 5, 2018 by robert okaji

Huazi Ridge

Limitless birds merging
with the autumn-colored hills
all along Huazi Ridge
this sadness, too, without end

Another adaptation. I hope that I’ve not strayed too far from the original’s tone.

The transliteration on Chinese-Poems.com offers:

Fly bird go no limit
Join mountain again autumn colour
Up down Huazi Ridge
Melancholy feeling what extreme

“Huazi Ridge” last appeared on the blog in June 2016.

15 thoughts on “Huazi Ridge (After Wang Wei)”

John on January 4, 2018 at 7:08 am said:

Well done!

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- robert okaji on January 4, 2018 at 8:36 am said:
  
  Thanks very much, John.
  
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E on January 4, 2018 at 8:40 am said:

The words and images together, I could feel my belly fly. !

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- robert okaji on January 4, 2018 at 4:16 pm said:
  
  I hope that didn’t make you nauseous. 🙂
  
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  - E on January 4, 2018 at 6:39 pm said:
    
    No, I literally felt like I took flight. It was a beautiful feeling! 🙂
    
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    - robert okaji on January 4, 2018 at 8:36 pm said:
      
      Oh, good. Sometimes those sudden ascents can get to you!
      
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grumpygorman on January 4, 2018 at 3:18 pm said:

very nice poem.

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- robert okaji on January 4, 2018 at 4:16 pm said:
  
  Thanks, Anthony.
  
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joanne the geek on January 4, 2018 at 7:27 pm said:

There’s a nice wistfulness in your version. I really enjoyed it.

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- robert okaji on January 4, 2018 at 8:36 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much, Joanne!
  
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memadtwo on January 4, 2018 at 8:27 pm said:

Pensive. Those wings…(K)

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- robert okaji on January 4, 2018 at 8:37 pm said:
  
  I certainly can’t resist them!
  
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  - memadtwo on January 5, 2018 at 4:25 am said:
    
    Me either.
    
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derrickjknight on January 5, 2018 at 2:49 am said:

I was going to say what John has said, so I’ll settle for nice adaptation

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- robert okaji on January 5, 2018 at 8:44 am said:
  
  😄 Thanks, Derrick!
  
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