Bonsai
no feature enhanced
but beauty of
the whole and
its container the
tree is not
deprived and grows
as it must
though slowly like
a wave which
gathers itself for
years there is
no completion only
process a lapse
which presumes the
most delicate design
Originally published in Aileron in 1988, “Bonsai” appeared on the blog in December 2014.
Such a pretty bonsai. And a beautiful and short poem π
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Thanks very much!
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This is lovely, Robert. I am learning much from you. I have always felt sorry for Bonsai trees and likened them to the bound feet of women. This poem let me see differently.
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Thank you, Sarah.
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Perfect form, just like the bonsai!
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Thank you, Peter. Perfect, but only in its imperfection. π
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Beautiful
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Thank you!
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Now that’s going back. It’s fascinating to see how your stylistics have changed over the years, Bob. As I read it, I was thinking, this is so different from ‘typical’ Okaji stuff I’ve read–and then I see it’s from (or at least was published in) 1988. That explains a lot about the unaccustomed mechanics I see/hear going on here. It’s also nice to deviate from the normal (whatever that is) or expected as well.
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The concerns have remained the same, but the presentation has changed a bit. I stole the form (five stanzas consisting of three-lines containing three words) from my friend Prentiss Moore, whose poems were utterly (and delightfully) different from mine – we assumed different stances within the same structure. He was a much more mature poet, and I flailed a lot back then.
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Korean bonsai are remarkable, i’ve seen them looking as if growing out of rock.
i actually think you’ve developed a more rendered grip on pauses than in these old poems. The jarring for me doesn’t match the subject, or maybe i am missing something & you could perhaps explain that to help me understand. Your poems as i’ve told you before are exceptionally well structured around a pattern of breath, which i can follow organically, but i, how can i put it? i don’t really know how to read these, if that makes sense.
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It makes perfect sense. These are the poems of a young poet who hadn’t yet found his way. The creative impulses come from the same place, but the execution of the pieces, the writing and rhythms, especially when read aloud, differ greatly. Now, when I read them, they sound like the product of someone who attended the William Shatner/Captain Kirk School of Elocution. π¬
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Haha. William Shatner’s album is one of the funniest things i ever heard. That man had some intense rhythms.
Well you found your way Bob, no doubt about that.
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Wonderful! Truly depicts this art.
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Thank you!
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This is a beautifully written piece. It’s not like your usual style…but it fits the image perfectly to a T. That’s a rather sprightly specimen of bonsai there…
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Thanks, DJ. I wish I were so sprightly!
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Oh…but you are with poetry! The pen is mighty in the correct hands π
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Beautifully written lovely little piece π
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Thanks very much!
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“no completion only /process” –that’s a good philosophy for life in general I think. We’re always on the road. (K)
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It’s the journey, not the destination!
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The form pleasingly matches the subject. What sort of poem would you write about bonsai now, I wonder?
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An epic!
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Haha!
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A most delicate, concise and thoughtful arrangement of words Bob, much like your topic. Nicely done:)
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Thanks very much, Steve.
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Beautiful words and pictures…refreshing.
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So pleased you found it so. Thank you.
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Considering bonsai as a concept, “…and / its container the / tree…” takes on an interesting meaning.
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Oh, those little twists and turns of thought…
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Thanks for the awesome writing. I have shared it on my twitter page.
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Thanks for sharing! By the way, I just found your comment in my spam folder. I don’t know why it was there, but thought you should know.
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